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I slip to sleep
Awake in fragile dreams
That tomorrow will be broken.

I sigh in sleep
Upon make believe
As the curtain falls open.

I shudder and shiver
While the dreams grow strange
Like some unknown omen.

I sift in silence
Through these foggy visions
Where words are left unspoken.

I sit and stiffen  
As the beggars march
And I am given my due token.

In dreams shadows slither
From these pondering worlds that
Come from the times considered golden.

In the stillness and silence
These faint fragile allusions
Fade away as brains are awoken.
©2008-2009 ~adurna-rose
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Author's Comments

I heard the term fragile dreams somewhere and ended up with this.
It's different then my other stuff but I still wanted your guys opinion on it.

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umm i think it's perfect
I don't know, I just liked the alliterations at the beginning of each stanza and the rhyme scheme..
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my christmas gift: :rose:
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Thanks, I am really glad you liked it.
And thanks for the fav too!

I just want to say thank you for being the one person who has read my stuff since I have basically been on here. You are awesome! :love:

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"If you can dream - and not make dreams your master;"-Kipling

[link] Aragorn is Mine! ha ha Bishie Stalker club rocks!
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Seems to me that you're poetically describing someone going into and coming out of a coma. In a lovely way.

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Don't worry about a thing. 'Cuz every little thing, is gonna be alright. Rise up this morning, smiled with the rising sun. Three little birds pitch by my doorstep. Singing sweet songs of melodies pure and true. Sayin' "This is my message to you."
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I wasn't thinking a coma, but it is always good to get anothers interpretation. Thats what is so beautiful about poetry, it can mean different things to different people.

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"If you can dream - and not make dreams your master;"-Kipling

[link] Aragorn is Mine! ha ha Bishie Stalker club rocks!

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